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Post by Robert Locksley Tue Feb 03, 2015 1:12 pm

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The Prince of Thieves

Name: Robert Locksley, Earl of Huntingdon. 
Age: 26 (848)
Date of Birth: 3rd January, 1167
Date of Death: 12th October, 1193

Gender: Male
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual
Blood Type: B

Alignment: Chaotic Good
Main Theme: Ft.
Battle Theme: Clavar La Espada

The Face that Rocked Nottingham

Height: 5' 11'' | 180 cm
Weight: 
72 Kg | 158 lbs

Eye Color: Rob's eyes are a strange hazel color, a mix of brown and green. 
Hair Color and Style: Like the vast majority of England during his time period, Robert's hair is an earthy brown, just a few shades above chestnut. He's even joked a few times that it was his hair more than anything else that acted as camouflage among the trees of Sherwood.  

As you might expect from living in a forest, Robert has gotten used to not styling his hair at all, simply letting it fall as it may. Because of this fact, there is almost a weave-like series of tangles and knots between different strands of his hair, and the moment the wind picks up it could be blown into a completely different hair style and all Robert will do will be to make sure it doesn't get in his eyes. 

Physical Appearance: Standing 5' 11', the man that was once much taller than his average countryman is now slightly shorter than average, his toned but plain body causing very little impact on those around him. Even his face, whilst unarguably handsome, isn't amazing and this leads to the very core of Robert's being - it's his spirit that's unforgettable, not his body. Whilst men like Iskander and Diarmuid strike an imposing figure over their opponent, Robert can sneak through a crowd, undetected until the very moment that he strikes. 

There are ridiculous legends about "Robin Hood" that would suggest that he would strut around in something garish and bright green, an outright lie. Instead, the truth is a lot more simple. In the clothes most familiar with his time, he simply wore a leather jerkin, dyed dark green so as to help blend in with his surroundings. Underneath that, he wore a pair of stockings as was common in his time, as well as a loose-fitting shirt with a hood to allow him to hide his face, which gave him his name. 

However, that being said, Robert is above anything else a covert, adaptive man who cares more about being efficient and being able to do his duty than about nostalgia and going what he was remembered for. As such, he wears whatever he can get his hands on, usually a t-shirt and jeans so as to blend in with his surroundings, though there is one exception. No matter his outfit, Rob wears a long, khaki military trench-coat with a hood, giving at least some slight hint to his legend. 

What Makes a Legend?

Servant Class and Status: Archer (Subclass: Sabre, Assassin)
Base of Legend: England

Origin: Robert's origin might perhaps be obvious if you know his legend; Charity. It is his destiny to be the more privileged, the more powerful, looking down at those who're in a terrible situation and offering assistance. No matter how dire the situation, no matter how impossible the odds are of winning, he can't sit back and allow injustice to happen because he knew it would be difficult to oppose. It is his fate to walk the path of decency.

Wish Desired: Utopia | Robert was raised in a world where poor were broken under the boot-heel of men simply because they were born to a higher-classed family than they were. With his high conscience and his desire to make sure that the world is safe whilst his superiors are gone, Robert wants nothing more than a utopia where everyone has an equal chance to be happy no matter their creed, color, gender or disability. 

Virtues


- Adaptable | Robert survived his "reign of terror" for so long simply because he was remarkably  adaptable. No matter how terrible a situation might seem at the outset, he managed to find something in every situation to work with. Every cloud has a silver lining, and he's the man who will find and exploit said silver for every cent its worth. 

Amicable | Despite his playful and judgmental nature to those who he views as immoral, Robert's greatest strength is his amicability. He is the sort of person who honestly strives to get on with everyone who has yet to prove that they're scum. Until such a point as someone falls into the "villain" category in his mind, everyone is a potential ally and a friend to aid if an opportunity arrives. 

- Benevolent | There is something undeniable about Robert, and that's his benevolent attitude. Despite being raised as a noble and all that that meant during his time period, Rob believes everyone deserves to be given fair treatment and to be given respect. He will go out of his way to aid other people, and unless specifically attempting to bait someone into making a mistake, will avoid making jokes at someone's expense. 

- Just | As a young boy, Rob's father taught him the importance of justice and one very crucial part that everyone else seems to ignore; justice is circumstantial. Stealing money from the debauched to save the lives of the starving is justice whereas executing said thief is a crime. This doesn't mean that he encourages all forms of stealing though, it simply means he's relativistic with his justice - the lesser of two evils is always the better option. 

- Open-Minded | Serving in King Richard's honor guard, you might expect for him to have developed a strong hatred of the eastern "savages" as many of his allies did, closing his mind off from the rest of the world. However, it was through his exposure to the holy land and the east that Rob learned something; everyone is simply another human, no matter their creed, color or gender. 

He was infamous for letting blacks, Saracens and women into his band of outlaws during his time, and even now he refuses to judge someone based on anything other than their character. this further extends to any new technology or development. Everything needs to be seen unbiased and taken for what it is, not what it looks like. 

- Reliable | Despite being able to be classed as an assassin and having a mind and set of skills perfectly designed for tricking others and manipulating them, Robert is a gentleman crook. He will never go back on his word, and once someone he sees as a friend or ally has asked him to do something, he will truly try his hardest to see it through. Because of this, no matter how bizarre his actions might seem, he is truly the kind of man that his friends can put their faith in. 

Vices


- Contemptuous | Robert has an intense sense of right and wrong and holds everyone else to said scale. When someone falls into the wrong spectrum without a good excuse and seemingly acts just for their own benefit, Robert quickly begins to physically hate said person as if they had physically wronged him even if their sins have nothing to do with him. He's not a misanthrope by any means, and he understands sometimes wrongs must be done to stop worse deeds, but sometimes there is just no excuse, and then that person becomes scum. 

- Deceptive | As you might expect from someone who could class as an Assassin, Robert is a very deceptive person. His Noble Phantasm, his tactics, even his personality rely on him being able to trick people into playing into his hands so that he can do what he feels is right. Even though he's reliable and keeps his word, his ability to play others like chess pieces makes many other people distrust or even despise him. 

- Judgmental | As aforementioned, Robert has a strong moral compass, and holds everyone to the same regard. He doesn't have a very high expectation of other people, but there are those who resent anyone who's willing to look at other people's actions as if he was some sort of sinless judge. He is heavily laden down with sin and will still throw the first stone, attempting to make the world a better place by pointing out others failures and missteps on the path to goodness. 

- Mocking | One of the many things immortalized about "Robin" is his sense of humor and his ability to laugh in the face of death. This might count as a good thing were it not for the fact that other people have to deal with this lightheartedness. 

He makes jokes and banters with other people in an attempt to try and disentangle himself from situations and be able to make difficult choices easier, but very few other people actually know this and simply mistake his levity for not taking things serious enough. Because of this, people think he's childish a lot of the time, and underestimate his decision making capabilities.

- Passionate | There are many things that catch Robert's interest; Ballads, stories, legends, jokes, friendship, romance, even sex. Whilst other people might be demure and shy about their desires, Robert acts on his whims and does what he wants when he wants to do it unless something is at stake. 

In a situation with no impending threat to innocents, he's just as likely to be found seducing some fair maiden as he is drinking with friends or visiting a bard (read: Listening to music). This compounds on other people's accusations of his childishness and leads some to believe he's a pervert.  

- Self-righteous | Touching on it again, Robert's sense of morality leads him to have a sense of self-righteousness due to his own actions. He's hardly sanctimonious, he won't give lectures about how much better he is than other people, but this fact clearly affects some of his decision making and how he perceives other people. Though he's a thief, an adulterer and even a killer, Robert still sees his heart as pure and good, and will act accordingly, much to the chagrin of other people.  

The Warrior's Blades

Crusader


A hardened veteran of the Third Crusade, Robert served in his king's honor guard and became proficient with weapons from England, France and Saracen weapons alike. This legendary mastery over weapons and his environment only increased during his years in Sherwood Forest and raiding Nottingham, as he developed an uncanny ability to use any weapon that he put his hand to, mastering disciplines and sciences to trick his noble victims and a great use of the very world around him as a weapon. 

What this Noble Phantasm allows Robert to do is to instantly be able to use whatever weapon he takes his hand to, as long as it is designed to be used as such. He can wield a gun or a chainsaw just as easily as he would a bow and arrow or a sword. Not only that, but his prana makes a record of the weapons that he has taken his hand to, allowing him to recall them at will by forming a facsimile out of his prana, legitimizing the legend of never running out of arrows.  

Heart of England


The most famous legend of "Robin Hood" was that of his band of outlaws, his Merry Men, who made Sherwood Forest their home. Made up of countless men and women from all walks of life who decided his cause were noble enough to cut ties with their normal lives and take up living on the lam in the forest as outlaws, this band became infamous for their number, their skill, their dedication to the Prince of Thieves himself, as well as Good King Richard, and their ability to seemingly come out of nowhere to rob you of your purse. 

This intense bond of loyalty and friendship exists long after their bodies have decayed, allowing Robert to call on them at will, summoning any of his merry men from the bonds of history, appearing upon the physical plane and assisting in his endeavors. Obviously, some men are more skilled at some things than others (Little John is freakishly strong but thick as a plank, whilst Alan of Dale is amazingly spry and witty but frail as a twig) but they all serve an integral part in his plan. 

Taking this ability to it's ultimate stage, costing huge amounts of prana and putting great strain on Rob's body, Rob is able to forge a reality marble of Sherwood Forest, trapping his foes within this sprawling wood, tricking and trapping them so that they never have to see the light of day again. 

My Fable

The History: Robert was born the only child of Lord and Lady Locksley, themselves nobles under King Henry II. Sadly, his birth took his mother out of the world, as it did with many women at the time - medical science was very poor at that time, and so it was accepted as an unfortunate happenstance rather than a tragedy, and he was instead taught solely by his father, Malcolm Locksley. 

His father being a renowned warrior and champion of justice, he learned from his old man just how important it was to treat people well and to lead justly and without fear of reprisal. Everyone, his father said, could be judged under god, but that doesn't mean you should fear the judgment of your fellow men. As you can imagine, this sense of intelligent but fearless leadership made him very popular with his peasants, all except for a lord from a nearby village - Lord Bastien of Gisborne, a half-french nobleman who had his own son around Robert's age, Guy. 

The rivalry between the two families was well recorded, though little came of it. In fact, it seemed almost as if Guy and Robert might change the bad blood, as they were quite good friends in their youth. Guy was a good three years older, but they were both interested in swordplay and archery, so their interests allowed them to overlap a fair bit. This shared interest, and to some degree, shared personality made an uneasy friendship between the two of them. Sadly, the events of one autumn morning would change that. 

During one of his father's fights with Lord Gisborne, it appears that one or the other knocked over a brazier and the building they were in set on fire. As the estate was on the outskirts of the village, nobody noticed until it was too late to stop it properly. Later, when they walked among the ashes of the destroyed Gisborne estate, they would find three charred corpses, presumed to be that of Lord and Lady Gisborne as well as Lord Locksley. Both Guy and Robert had become orphans in a single day, and it was evident that Guy blamed Rob's father. 

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The next few months were difficult - being only twelve at the time, he was not of age and instead the village passed to his steward, Erwin. Erwin was an egotist of the first degree, often robbing from the men of Locksley village through unscrupulous taxes or simply evicting families who had items that he wanted. Robert despised the old man, but knew there was very little that he was able to do, as he was simply unable to lead the village properly yet. 

Without being able to spend his time leading his people, Rob instead decided to further his education. His father had imparted a knowledge of the English language to him, as well as basic training with a sword and a bow, and these gifts were turned into Rob's weapons. By the age of thirteen, he was the best shot in his village, by the age of fourteen he was the best shot in the county, and by fifteenth his skill in contests and taking down animals that roamed the land around locksley manor had even managed to reach the king. 

One summer during Robert's sixteenth year, a contest was held at the capital, an archery challenge that was held by the king himself in an attempt to find men to work as his honor guard. The country had been at peace with other nations for almost thirty years now so it seemed bizarre that he was seeking for his kings-guard right now, but it seemed that the rebellion of the king's sons a few months prior had taken out a fair few members of the king's court, including Lord Osmond of Wessex, leaving a position free. Out of egotism and a desire to prove himself, Robert decided to go after this prize himself.  

The events of the competition have become legend, though the legend has been adjusted to be some sort of slight against Prince John many years later - Robert's skill and natural talent shone through, to the point of even being able to split his final competitor's arrow to hit the center of the bullseye, a feat that was supposed to be impossible. His position was given, and from that day forward Robert became a member of the King's personal guards, abandoning his old life behind. 

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Despite his new position, he wasn't actually needed to do much; He was expected to protect him should a war arise, and he would be expected to call his peasants to arms if the country should fall to the fires of war once again, but thankfully peace reigned for many more years. The most notable things to happen were his meeting with the king's sons, John and Richard. 

Despite Henry's fawning over John, there was something about him Robert never quite came to like. Oh, sure, he seemed like a kind man and there was certainly goodness in his heart, but there was something snake-like about him. His smile turned his stomach, though he would never admit this in front of the king. Richard, on the other hand, was much more Robert's style. Strong, determined, and with a will as hot as fire. Their relationship would come to be famed, and despite Henry's attempts to disinherit his son, Robert's counselling won through, allowing Richard to come to the throne soon after the fall of his father. 

During his time at court, Robert met many men and women of every walk of life. However, a specific young girl was the first in Robert's mind through the years he spent alongside his majesty. Despite the prejudice that women faced in those days, and the fact that strong women were looked down upon heavily, it was the strength of will of Marian that Robert came to fawn over. She was a beauty, a chestnut-haired maiden with fire in her heart, and Marian easily won Robert's affections. Their romance made rumors all over court, and it is very likely that they would have become wed if it was not for the events that led to the King's death. 

The King had been extremely difficult for a long time, and despite his position in the kings-guard, a festering resentment spread in Robert's heart as he began to openly insult and degrade his true successor, Richard. When Richard joined with France and rebelled against his father, Robert made a very controversial decision as a member of the kings-guard and changed sides, siding with the young prince over the man that Robert truly viewed as being despotic. He had to go, before he brought a proper war with the French. 

The next few months involved several battles, each one bloodier than the last, but finally they had forced Henry back into one of his castles, Chinon. It was shortly afterwards that Henry paid homage to King Philip of France, naming Richard as his true heir and shuffling off the mortal coil. Robert's decision to side with Richard resulted in a close friendship between the two, and a few months later when the crusade was called in the Holy Land, Robert came as one of the eight remaining members of his kings-guard. 

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The crusade was so horrific it doesn't feel entirely right describing it - villages burned to the ground, thousands of people slaughtered because they couldn't get out of the way in time, and though people claimed to be doing it for Christendom, the amount of rape and murder that happened when the English owned a city was horrific. After spending his entire life believing in Christianity and righteousness, Robert was hit in the face with the exact opposite of everything that he stood for. It was institutionalized barbarity, nothing more.

Yet, even in the darkest moments, Robert never stopped fighting. Even when the very sight of blood began to sicken his stomach, he refused to leave his king's side because he knew he had to be there. His king never partook in any of the cruelty, he always seemed gallant and never took excess 'thrill' in butchering innocents. As long as the king was alive, his dreams of a just and benevolent country was still alive, and so he fought as long as he had to to make sure that his majesty came home safely.

However, when outside of battle, Robert took to spending time with the people of Acre - Over his active service, he learned their language and even listened to the teachings of the Qu'ran, making him one of the first Christians to actually bother to learn about the people that they were killing. He even made many friends among the civilians, and learned the universal truth that all people, no matter where they come from, are integrally equal.

Sadly, during one of the more serious attacks against Acre, Robert wound up getting impaled on a saracen blade, and being brought to the brink of death by said attack. Due to being unable to fight properly for a while, and having spent many years in active service to the King and his father, Richard made the decision to send Robert home to Locksley to recover. They were so certain the war would be over by the end of the year that they told him to not worry about coming back, and to just make sure that the country was ready for them when they returned.

So, for the final time, Robert said goodbye to his majesty and was taken out on a ship from Acre harbor. Several months later, his ship moored in King's Lynn and he rode all the way home to Locksley, expecting a warm welcome from his beloved people.

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The welcome was... not what he had expected. In his absence, Gisborne had been given control of his lands and the sheriff that he had been friends with since childhood had died of old age, leaving the position to fall into the hands of a corrupt man - William Vaisy. The man had increased rates far beyond what was reasonable, and worse of all, with Prince John left it was completely legal. The Sheriff had complete authority, and clearly held a grudge against Robert for betraying John's father to side with Richard.

In the first few weeks that he spent at court, Robert was constantly excluded from proper meetings that would affect anything serious, and found his decisions being overridden by the sheriff himself. On the plus side, he had been given his lands back, as it would have been illegal to keep them from him without just cause, but Vaisy made sure to dig his heel into him as much as possible. He made everything much worse for Locksley than anywhere else in the shire, and when people complained, he blamed Robert, saying that he had allowed them to be taxed extra to pay for the holy war that he cared so much about.

As you can imagine, this didn't sit well at all with Rob. Still, he was certain that if he tried for long enough, eventually the sheriff would get over his grudge and would make everything easier for everyone involved. Sadly, the longer he stayed in the position, the more he attempted to ruin Rob's life. The final straw came when he put the son of one of Malcolm's remaining friends on the gallows for an offense that would have, at most, required he lose his hand. The young boy was called Much, and Robert vaguely remembered him as he was only around five years younger than Rob himself was.

Attempting to appeal this judgment, Rob was told that the sentence would be lowered to cutting off both of the boy's hands, if he did it himself. It was clearly an attempt to bait him into foolish action, but Rob took the offer nonetheless. Yet, his situation haunted me for the days up until the persecution, and he knew he couldn't sit back and let this judgment happen.

On the morning of the sentence, Much's father came out to see his son suffer at the hands of his old friend's son. The old man's begging for mercy was the straw that broke the camel's back, as he turned the sword on the guard that was holding him down, cutting his hand off instead before grabbing Much and leading him and his father out of the castle. The fact that none of them died from the ensuing volley of arrows was a miracle, but it earned him a fair amount of fame and reputation.

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As spring turned into summer, and summer turned into Autumn, Robert began to collect more and more men to join with him. John Little ("Little John"), Young Gamwell ("Will Scarlet"), Alan of Dale, and many more besides. With the language he had learned in the Middle East, he also managed to recruit freed slaves to his cause. With the fact that every single man under his command was constantly at risk of being sent to the gallows, the people made jokes about him "robbing hooded men", which would over time wind up getting perverted to "Robin Hood".

However, something else was famed about his attacks against the sheriff. Or, rather, two things. The first was that he would always donate whatever he stole from the sheriff, whether it be actual money or just rations, to the people of Nottingham. The second was the fact that next to nobody died. Sometimes his men were killed in action, but it seemed that the horrors of the crusades had turned him soft. Even when he had the chance, again and again, to kill the sheriff, something turned in his stomach and he found himself unable to. Guards lost eyes, arms, and would occasionally bleed out from wounds after the event, but they never killed a man purposefully.

That was, until the end of the year when a new girl appeared in court. Spurred by the rumors that her beloved had come home, Marian had traveled to Nottingham in an attempt to get him to see reason. However, during her visit, the sheriff kidnapped her and held her to ransom, threatening Robert that he would end her life if he didn't surrender to his guards. As you can imagine, this infuriated him beyond belief.

During the attack that ensued to rescue his lady fair, Robert killed for the first time since he left the holy land. As he dragged her before the crowd, a single arrow was launched, hitting Vaisy through his treacherous throat and spearing his windpipe. The man quickly expired, and Robert used the ensuing chaos to get Much and John to whisk his beloved away into the forest. Thus Guy of Gisborne became the Sheriff of Nottingham, and the childhood friends were the final players on the stage of Nottingham.

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The final battle that Robert lived through was an attack on Nottingham castle as he heard rumors that his king was coming home. In his mind, he had to fulfill the promise that he had made to the King - he would make it safe for him to come home to, and that meant getting rid of Guy. Marian, having spent the last five years of her life away from her beloved, refused to leave his side and so joined the fray along with every single member of his Merry Men. A promise was made that, even if Robert fell, they would continue to fight to make the country fit for Richard. They, they agreed, were Robin Hood, it was not one man but a symbol of freedom.

Alongside Tuck and Bakht, two of the few merry men who could actually read, he focused his attention on a technology that he had learned about in the Middle East - Chinese snow, or gunpowder. They ferried in the supplies, and made sure to get his men to smuggle the stuff into the keep. There were too many of Gisborne's men to kill on their own, so they came up with a simple solution - destroy Nottingham castle itself.

The final day dawned, and Robert surrendered to Gisborne's men, claiming he was sick of the dance they were performing. Consequently, he was dragged to Nottingham castle's jail, where they had bribed the torturer to allow him to escape. Now free in the castle, he worked in connecting a fuse to the barrels, and  fled quickly after having let the trail alight.

The explosion that followed leveled the castle, killing countless guards, and Gisborne himself. His men had made sure that members of the public avoided the castle, and so no innocent blood was spilled. After almost three years of the same song and dance, Robert had done it. Guy was dead, Vaisy was dead, their forces were wiped out, and John was spited. Sadly, due to still wearing prisoner garb, Robert was left completely unprotected for the splinter of stone that shot through the base of his spine, crippling him.

Though he was rescued by his men before any remnants of the guards found his paralyzed body, it was clear that he would never move again. In a moment of pity, and a desire to help him find peace, Marian used the poison that Robert had given her on him without his knowledge, letting him slip from the world quietly and without pain. As he realized he was dying, he used his last bit of strength to fire an arrow from his bow, and telling his men to bury him where it landed.

So ended the tale of Robert Locksley, Earl of Huntingdon and legendary prince of thieves.


Roleplay Sample wrote:The sun was slowly going down over the forest, and the day was at an end. The world outside the forest could retire to their slumber, and something about Robert told him that he should get going too. The pain of his injuries were gone, despite how much they had been hurting since that stone had cut him, and though he was thankful for the reprieve he had been with enough of his dying comrades to know what that meant.

So... this was the end. He had often wondered what it would be like, how he would be treated after his death, but he knew that this was not what he had wanted. He wanted so much more.. he wanted to make his marriage to Marian official, he wanted to have children to show around Locksley village. He wanted to see Much's father smile as he finally got his son back. He wanted... he wanted to live on, but he knew he couldn't.

Yet, despite those dreams of the future, he knew that this was the right way for things to have ended. He was with his beloved family, those men that had stuck by his side for so many adventures, and he could see Marian smiling at him with those tear-streaked eyes from her position in the camp. They had won, hadn't they? Guy was gone, Vaisy was gone, and the castle was naught but rubble. Everyone was safe...

Darkness was closing in now. Not just in the sky, but in his vision as well. It was inevitable, he supposed. But, still, one last thing before he went, right? Stretching over to the bow and quiver they had left by his side, he picked them up with his hands... they were trembling. He couldn't feel them properly, so he had no idea they were trembling so much. He couldn't aim... a single solitary tear rolled down his cheek. This was what he was, at the end. Powerless.

Powerless to stop the war, powerless to stop Prince John, powerless to bring his beloved Richard home. He was a silly man, a fool who had thought that the glory days would never leave him. The evenings that he spent under this green canopy seemed to have gone so quickly, and soon his time would be over.

Yet, before he let his body go and simply collapsed, Marian came over and helped him pull the string taut. Yes... with her strength, he could do it. That was the way of it, he supposed. All he had ever held was the power of those around him. He had friends, and they donated their power to him, and with their power he protected their loved ones, and in turn their loved ones protected their own loved ones. It was how humanity worked.

The arrow sailed through the air as he let the string go, laying his head on the shoulder of Marian, smiling softly as he imparted the last wish.
"Bury me where the arrow falls."

As if a cloud had blotted over the sun, everything went black, and Robin felt his body go limp.


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Post by Robert Locksley Wed Feb 18, 2015 10:55 am

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Post by Viktor Thu Feb 19, 2015 12:47 am

I guess, the only remark I got about this application is thy appearance section. You wrote it rather nicely, but if it weren't for that image of yours, one couldn't quite imagine Robert if they were basing it on the writing alone. 

Don't think this is an actual mistake, more like a personal quirk of mine so you may edit it or not, it is up to you. 

However, all things considered, you are Pre-Approved.
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Post by Oningyo Thu Feb 19, 2015 8:43 am

Creativity ~ 200 / 300

You haven’t gone and reinvented robin hood here, but it’s a good interpretation of the legend and the facts about the man. Only downfall I would say is that he is an archer class and his power doesn’t immediately lend itself to projectile weapons. Sure it’s in his legend, but at least the gate of babylon actually shot all those weapons.

The only thing I can dock for though is that crusader strikes me as a mix between Lancelots ability to use any weapon mixed with Emiya’s ability to summon any sword. You justify it sure, but I can’t help feeling that there’s nothing truly unique there.

Introduction & Physical Description ~ 400 / 400

Personally, I don't see anything worth docking points for here. What we absolutely need detailed is detailed, and it's fairly easy to infer things like his walk and general demeanor from what's given here. While it would be nice if it was possible to add more to the physical, it would come off as fluff for this character.

Mentality ~ 300 / 400

Amicable and Benevolent fall somewhat close here. They are distinct, but by a hair’s margin. You could have saves space merging the two under one heading or the other. Same thing in vices. Contemptuous and Judgmental probably could have been merged since they’re so closely related. It sort of feels like here that the description of one trait was split up since one part leaned close to a different title.

Power ~ 300 / 300

Noble phantasms are good, though as I said over Skype, a chainsaw was not meant to be a weapon. It just makes for a rather good one if you have nothing else.

History & Rp Sample ~ 600 / 600

Would have preferred a little bi about being summoned into the modern world, or for the rp sample to be as such since that’s where he will be existing, but otherwise nothing to dock for.

Approved for 1800
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